在雅思写作中,再好的模板(好的句式),你再好地去运用,如果没有合理的思维,没有逻辑,分数就是5.5分及以下。今天小编给大家带来了雅思写作提升根本在思维与逻辑而非语言,希望能够帮助到大家,一起来学习吧。
你可能想到的是,“不同意(少了一些语言,生活不会变容易些)”,因为少了一些语言,“部分民族文化就会消失”。这个点是存在问题的,因为没有答题。“少了一些语言,部分民族文化就会消失”,和“生活不会变容易”有什么联系呢?感觉是2个无关的句子。
这个答案会导致什么样的问题呢?评分标准Task Response没有达到。有什么办法补救呢?(想想民族文化的部分消失和生活不会变简单有什么联系)
可以考虑的答案是:少了文化特色,旅游就少了,旅游带来的经济增长就少了,钱少了自然生活就变难了。
语言的消失-民族文化的部分消失-旅游较少了-旅游带来的经济增长就减少了-钱少了生活就困难了。
推理越长,就可以凑到越多的字数?
请尽早摒弃这样的想法。
我们来这样思考一下:
①某种语言的消失,能导致这个民族的文化有多大部分消失?②这部分民族文化的消失,能导致旅游减少多少?(只有一点点)③旅游减少了,对当地经济的影响有多大?只要不是旅游国家或者旅游城市,影响就很小。那又有多少个主要靠旅游发展的国家和城市呢?所占比例非常小!
上面那些影响的大小是怎么估算出来的?通过日常的知识积累(平时一定要多接收信息,多思考)。一个推出另一个,但是推出可能性都不是100%,那么第一个推到最后一个,可能性是多大呢?可能性会随着中间层级的数量的增加而减小。其实每次往前推,可能性都会变小,所以不要把推理做“长”了。
其实我们在答题的时候,一般会想到很多相关的信息,而不是一开始就想到最可靠的信息。然后,我们应该去斟酌并筛选出强的论证,(丢掉弱的论证)。
考虑如下论证:
1. 每种语言有自己的发音特点,和当地人的生理特征相称。换句话说,当部分语言消失时,部分人就要学习和自己生理结构不相称的语言,生活变难(比如,硬要日本人说英语)。
2. 一门独立的语言,包含很多表达当地人特点(感情,性格,思考方式等)的词和表达方式(想想那些只有当地人听得懂的字眼);统一化的语言常常没有这么精细。这样,当部分语言消失时,人们想表达的某些感情和个性就无法表达了,生活变难。
在雅思写作中,高大上的分论点是得分的关键吗?还是普通的观点配上优秀的语言?
如果我汉语不好,就无法表达我以上的意思,你会顺着看到这里吗?或者,我不能够有效地表达自己的意思,能让你学会这些东西吗?语言的重要性是极高的。
如果只靠语言,那么你就不必刷题了,因为你去背一篇语言完美的文章,考试的时候直接默写下来就可以了。这显然是不行的,再好的模板(好的句式),你再好地去运用,没有合理的思维,雅思写作就是5.5分及以下。
扩大你的知识量
多看《网易公开课》,尤其是里面的《TED》。《语言如何改变人类》(“27个盟国,说着23种语言,你需要253人的翻译队伍”)如果你看过上面这个视频,回答这个题目就会容易很多。
刷题
一起来看到这样三个分论点:
1. 跨文化交流变得容易 2. 获得资讯变得容易 3. 学习变得容易
其实这是有方法的。不过是把life分成了以上3个方面而已,这叫做分类法。多刷题,就会找到解题的各种套路!
The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population, This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialised and developing nations.
Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.
Model Answer:
In most countries of the world the population is increasing alarmingly. This is especially true in poor, undeveloped countries. Overpopulation causes a considerable number of problems.
In poor countries it is difficult to provide enough food to feed even the present number of people. In addition, education to limit the number of children per family is not always successful. Poorer countries usually have a lot of unemployment too, and an increase in population simply makes the situation worse. The environment also suffers when there are too many people living on the land.
In rich, industrialised and developing countries it is very difficult for governments to provide effective public services in overcrowded cities. Moreover, there is usually a great deal more crime, which is often due to high rates of unemployment. Further large increases in population only cause more overcrowding, unemployment and crime.
There are two main solutions to the overpopulation problem. Firstly, every woman who is pregnant, but who does not want to give birth, should be allowed by law to have an abortion. Secondly, governments must educate people to limit the size of the family. In China, couples are penalised financially if they have more than one child. This may seem cruel, but the "one-child policy" is beginning to have an effect in the world's most populous nation. Eventually, similar policies might also be necessary in other crowded nations such as India, for example.
To sum up, if the population explosion continues, many more people will die of starvation in poor countries, and life in the cities, even in affluent nations, will become increasingly difficult.
"Although abuse of the system are inevitable, social welfare payments are essential to protect the rights citizens have to a guaranteed minimum income in a democratic society".
Discuss.
Model Answer:
Social welfare is an essential element of an advanced society. Good systems are always abused, but that does not mean they are faulty. In my opinion, the two main reasons why welfare payments are necessary are as follows:
First of all, critics forget that there are many forms of welfare besides payments to the unemployed. Their negative opinions harm those who are not capable of earning a wage, such as single-parent mothers, the disabled, and the sick. Moreover, the unemployed have the right to an income, too. They are not always at fault for not having a job, and in most cases the tax they have paid in the past entitles them to assistance.
The second reason is that crime increases when people have no means of support. The desperately poor inevitably turn to crime, which is not only dangerous but costly. Policing the streets is more expensive than providing welfare. A policeman's wage is four or five times higher than a "dole" payment.
Certain members of society believe that people should look after themselves. They point out that welfare increases dependency on others and destroys dignity. This may be true, but in the case of the unemployed, the relief payments are usually temporary. It is surely the fault of the government if there are long-term unemployed. Welfare critics also believe that it is the responsibility of a victim's family to provide financial assistance. However, it is too expensive to provide complete help for a severely disabled person.
To conclude, it is vital to understand the need for welfare in a modern democratic society. Without welfare payments the poor are destined to become poorer. The first duty of a government is to provide a financial safety net for all disadvantaged persons, and that includes those without work.
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